I might not be the one that should be giving you comparisons with trance music but here's what I thought. First of, it sounds kind of old, concerning trance/techno trends.. probably because the impression in your mind is the impression that you got during the days when techno was just coming out, which was when it was the biggest. This is the same case with me.. I try to research current material, but it seems I can't get over the impression I got back then.
The synths sounds are probably right, just the phrases are what pushes the nostalgic button I think. And even tho I really like the chord progression in the tune, I don't think it's appropriate for this specific style of music. It's more conventional to use minor scales with a rather classical approach, but using arpegiaos all over the place. Many of these tunes have chords that last 2 or even 4 bars, which make them very ideal for intricate pad arrangements. But ya know, it isn't my main style so these are just my observations.
And finally... you probably shouldn't have a melody in there.. Err, I've yet to come accross a dance tune that has such a vivid melody. Most of the time, the melody, or the main focus of the tune would be the filter movement or the morphing of sounds, hence the great lean towards knob tweaking in real time.
Oh well, it is your first try, and I'm not very good at this myself so I guess this is all I can say. Musically, your tune is very correct. It's just new, and you have to break yourself in. The team of techno/trance people will update you on the rest.

It's always great to take a bite of a different style.
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